Desperately seeking d'Verse Poets Pub
someone to lovesomeone to hate
a reason to humiliate
Desperately seeking
to find some direction
to make a connection
to feel your rejection
Desperately seeking
a Ginsu knife
the meaning of life
somebody's wife
Desperately seeking
my moment of fame
where to lay the blame
and end to this shame
Desperately seeking
a shot at the top
some wings when I drop
back into the slop
Desperately seeking
Susan
Fernando
Willy
and Betty Jean
a place to lie down
and a chance to come clean
Desperately seeking
to find a new game
like ants a a picnic
where nobody came
Clever and well done.
ReplyDeleteI just stopped by via dVerse.
A creative take on that want ad...I think we all seeking for that "face" to accept us or for a chance to come clean ~
ReplyDeleteTimoteo, so sweet! This makes me want to write one too. I just might! (Is that all it takes?)I have been interviewing so many happily married poets that I am beginning to think only Sylvia Plath and I were cursed! Hee hee. Hang in there. You are wonderful, and someone will find you. I just hope she is worthy of you!
ReplyDeleteMADELINE,
ReplyDeleteThanks for visiting.
HEAVEN,
I did take a shower today, so that's part of the battle right there.
SHERRY,
That is just about the nicest thing anyone ever said to me. Except when Barbara Jo Wilkerson exclaimed: "A PAJAMA PARTY? OH HOW FUN!"
Hang in there yourself, my dear, and don't get too curious about ovens!
"where nobody came." Jeez, that breaks my heart. I'll stay clear of the oven, as well. : {
ReplyDeletea ginsu wife, someones wife...does not sound too far off...i think i know her....not sure if you really want anyone to call but give me your number and i might...
DeleteDesperation is never a pretty sight, my friend--I'm liking the next to last stanza best here, but its all good. If only the real 'ads' were half this honest.
ReplyDeletedang...that last stanza touched me most..sums it up for me...all that we want and seek and in the end...
ReplyDeletereally a nice song-like quality to it. I try to incorporate music into my work quite a bit and appreciate it when I can find a sense of music in another writers work. Really nice job and strong ending here. Thanks
ReplyDeleteThere's a lovely upbeat rhythm to this piece which contrasts wonderfully with the subject matter.
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed reading this - and although happily married, I can remember when I wasn't and no-one seemed to notice me.
THINGY, BRIAN, HEDGEWITCH, CLAUDIA, FRED, RUMOURSOFRHYME:
ReplyDeleteThanks for your input on this. I'm not sure anyone would really want ALL of these things, but it would be an interesting assemblage--kinda like the Twelve Days of Xmas!
Really enjoyed this, especially:
ReplyDeleteDesperately seeking
a shot at the top
some wings when I drop
back into the slop
__Ahhh yes, if no one comes to the picnic they will never find what they desperately seek. To and from, ants on the endlessly recirculating pathway.
ReplyDeleteto and fro
ants on this barren ground
New York taxies
What is bleak and barren to some... is not, to others; some are Desperately Seeking Sanity.
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LAURIE,
ReplyDeleteThanks...dropping into the slop no fun.
MAGYAR,
That's a great haiku--all depends on your perspective and your view, eh? I've essentially given up on the sanity--prefer to write poetry instead.
lovely loping lines!
ReplyDeleteThanks awfully for visiting my blog- consider yourself welcome ANYTIME
Aloha from Waikiki
Comfort Spiral
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like your look at the journey from a different angle
ReplyDeletehow are you???
You made me think how much more interesting "want" ads could be if people penned the truth, Tim.
ReplyDeleteHope you get whatever it is you want and if you go on a picnic you get there long before the ants show up! :)
Cool lyrical style lad. Focus on those first two lines brother!
ReplyDeleteI like this. I like the pace and the meter and the desire for more.
ReplyDeleteCheers,
Mark Butkus
CLOUDIA,
ReplyDeleteThanks so much...I'll drop by next time I'm in town!
MOONDUSTWRITER: Hangin' in there. And you?
TALON: Good advice!
OLD OLLIE: I'm with you, my man.
MARK: Thanks so much for looking in!
I love ambivalence ... meow ...
ReplyDeleteI think we're all kinda seeking that. Especially the Ginsu knife. Everyone wants a Ginsu knife, right? This reads like a dream. And, I hope you find what you're desperately seeking :o)
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