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Friday, October 25, 2019

THE WINDS OF CHANGE BLEND WITH AUTUMN ZEPHYRS SIGHING (collaborative poem from Sanaa Rizvi and Timoteo)



HE IS CREAM...SHE IS CHEESE...
WHAT A SPECTACULAR COMBINATION!

Sanaa and I began talking a few weeks ago and seemed to really hit it off. We discovered that we share the love of autumn, and so the poem before you quickly began to unfold. We hope you enjoy it and look forward to hearing your thoughts in the comments.



When the gales of November come early
I’m a total wreck 
wind knocked out of my sails
but I’ve set a course for 
The Sea Of Tranquility
and I’ll be there 
when that big moon 
sweeps these storms from my heart.


Now these clouds
cold, mean and gray sideways rain
point toward the dark road 
my mind is travelling in,
the bruising of November 
teaches one about existence, its brevity 
I wonder if the moon knows time
and course, as leaves curl in colors of Fall.


There is a melancholy vibe 
this time of year--
I can feel it in the forced gaiety 
beginning to build 
as I swim through the crowd, rudderless,
like a paper boat adrift on the breeze,
and for small moments
I will succumb to the mass hypnosis

With wild berries clinging for support,
I observe the breeze, 
an unseen one act nearly farce
painstakingly scrape to leave a patch of stillness
uncovered for a short while,
my lips are stained with the thought of woe
prevalent
hauling one to a place where light cannot reach.


But I’ve had it with these subterranean homesick blues.
I shall emerge from these depths--
the mole in your midst 
burrowing to the sun.
The world is fraught with overt boogeymen.
They cannot frighten survivors
who’ve been to scarier places in their own minds 
than your sardonic smile could ever intimate. 


Let this be the end 
as air’s imbued with wet leaves and contemplation
is a swirl of mist;
a sliver of dark orange disseminating doldrums.
My faith akin to myriad of stones 
that become the shade of highway that lies 
unruffled behind them-- 
I witness the break of day and run forth to embrace.  


Springs and autumns flash by in an instant.
I make a wish and the universe 
rains its poetry down upon me.
To embrace both the darkness and
the light within us is the way of understanding.
November brings the winds of change.
I stand in the awe-filled silence
waiting to feel its sharp graze against my cheek.


I could watch them a while, this feeling that blends 
with fall foliage
for when struck with the right note of sobriety 
even the most dismal of life’s turns are rendered facile. 
The hour smiles and extends its hand to me,
as rain conjures a delicate pattern 
upon my skin 
and the winds of change blend with autumn zephyrs sighing. 


60 comments:

  1. Wow! What a SPECTACULAR collaboration. I love how , in collaboration, inspiration seems heightened and the end result seems always to be the amplifying of both voices. I especially love "the mole in your midst burrowing towards the sun". And the universe raining poetry.........well, I loved it all. An exceptional collab! Yay!

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    1. Thank you so much, Sherry!❤️ I felt exactly the same way and think our poetic energies blended instantly! I am glad you enjoyed it 😍😍

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    2. I love that you picked out those lines, Sherry! Thanks for your wonderful comment!

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    1. Thanks so much, Linda. It's great to see you here.

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    2. Thank you so much, Linda 😘 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️

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  3. Alas, springs and autumns do flash by in an instant. Indeed all of life is that way, but I think we are even more aware of this when the seasons change. I like the hour smiling and extending its hand. It seems that that hour is beckoning and welcoming us, guided by those winds of change. Very nice collaboration. Not easy to achieve!!

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    1. Please accept our humble thanks for your kind words, Mary. Sanaa and I do so enjoy it when readers quote some of their favorite lines from the poem. (And we're wondering when the speculation will begin as to who wrote which lines or phrases) :)

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    2. Thank you so much, Mary 😘 I agree, we are more aware of the shift in mood as the seasons change and give us time to contemplate ❤️

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  4. Wow, indeed!!! And ha ha, Timoteo, the speculation already began in my case. But it is very seamless, so hard to pick. I was thinking alternate verses (first verse yours, second Sanaa's and so forth) but there are seven verses and I think you would have shared more equally. favourite lines and phrases? One – which I recognise as Sanaa's because she has used it elsewhere – 'as leaves curl in colours of fall'. I really love every line and every word of this – and stand-outs for me are

    To embrace both the darkness and
    the light within us is the way of understanding.
    November brings the winds of change.
    I stand in the awe-filled silence
    waiting to feel its sharp graze against my cheek.

    and

    The hour smiles and extends its hand to me,
    as rain conjures a delicate pattern
    upon my skin
    and the winds of change blend with autumn zephyrs sighing.

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    1. Oh boy, the parts of the two stanzas that you quoted, Rosemary--I'll tell you this much...we are each represented there! We thought we'd wait until most of the comments are in tomorrow before revealing our process...gotta keep 'em guessing until the end, right? So stay tuned! (Actually, there are eight stanzas!)

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    2. PS I will guess my first selection to be yours and the second Sanaa's. So interesting! If I am right, it would seem that each of you retains a distinctive voice even when blended so well with another's.

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    3. I think the aspect of the distinctive voice will become more recognizable when we reveal what our process was, and people will say, "Oh, of course, I knew it all along!" But before that maybe they really didn't. Smiles.

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  5. Thank you so much, Rosemary 😍😍 I quite enjoyed the creative flow and process. I found that the rhythm and words came on their own as the poem progressed ❤️

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  6. "The world is fraught with overt boogeymen." What a fantastic line! And so perfect for autumn, with Halloween approaching, and the Veil thinning...

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    1. So glad that line resonated with you, Magaly! And Halloween brings out the boogeyman in most of us. Don't watch those scary movies alone! :)

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    2. I can't get used to this 'boogeyman' business, LOL. We Aussies know quite well that it's 'bogyman'; even the Macquarie Dictionary says so, so there!

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    3. The difference is that bogymen don't really know how to boogie! :)

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    4. @Magaly; Yes it's delicious and perfect for Halloween that's approaching, so glad you liked it!!❤️

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    5. @Rosemary; Wow! So interesting to learn that it's "bogyman," in Macquarie Dictionary!❤️

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    6. Very true, Timoteo, bogymen sure don't boogie. They are SCARY!

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    7. "Boogeyman" is the typical spelling of the word in the U.S. "Bogeyman" seems to be the typical spelling in the U.K. and some other areas of the world. Speaking of scary, your instincts about our process in writing the poem were spot on. I wrote the first stanza. Sanaa wrote the second stanza. We alternated stanzas throughout the poem in that manner.

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  7. There are so many wonderful thoughts and images in this poem

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    1. Thank you Jae. I do feel that the poem whispers more and more secrets upon the second or third reading.

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    2. Thank you so much, Jae 😘 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️

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  9. I love your collaboration! From the title to the last line, so much that’s wonderful. I particularly enjoyed the opening stanza and the big moon sweeping storms from the heart of a total wreck, so familiar. I also love the lines:
    ‘…I swim through the crowd, rudderless,
    like a paper boat adrift on the breeze’
    and
    ‘November brings the winds of change.
    I stand in the awe-filled silence
    waiting to feel its sharp graze against my cheek.’

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    1. We're loving that you love it, Kim. Thanks so much!

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    2. Thank you so much, Kim 😍 we enjoyed writing it!❤️

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  10. Proof that collaboration pays...Big time. Salute!

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    1. Ron, you just reminded me of this great old inspirational song by Canned Heat called "Let's Work Together!"

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    2. Thank you so much, Ron! It was wonderful writing alongside Tim ❤️ and I ended up learning a lot from him!

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  11. What a wonderful collaboration! Both of you have managed to drag the darkness into the light and shown hope in the season.

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    1. Awww gosh!❤️ Thank you so much, Vivan 😍 so glad the poem resonated with you!❤️

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  12. This is such a seamless collaboration.. and the subject of the autumn is close to my heart too... it represent so much for me too, especially the passing of time...

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    1. Thank you so much, Bjorn 😃😃 so glad you enjoyed it!❤️

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  13. I love this collaberation Sanaa and Timoteo!!

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    1. Thank you so much, Carrie 😍 we are glad that you do!❤️

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  14. What a thrill to read this. My heart heard it like a song - a wonderful duet of distinct yet perfectly blended voices unified by sense and emotion. Well done, you two!

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    1. Thank you so much, H 😃😃 so glad you enjoyed it!❤️

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    2. Thanks for your exquisite comment, H. Hennenburg!

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  15. Certainly enjoyed reading your poem.

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    1. Thank you so much, Julian 😃☕ so good to see you!❤️

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  16. Some poems, and this is one of them, seem like the essence of a novel, steeped and wafting through the air. The turns and the images, the uplifts and chills...you both have managed to make a secure structure of them and the result is a marvelous read!

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    1. Awww gosh!❤️ Thank you so much, Chrissa 😃 so glad you liked it!

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  17. What an awesome collaboration! This reads like a poetic ride as it moves through so many good things in so many ways. It was a pleasure to read this beautifully rendered, evocative piece!

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    1. Wendy: It's so heartwarming to hear comments such as these. Thank you for being there. Much love!

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  18. I think you described November in Iowa very well. The winds change and "melancholy" is what it is. Thank you

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    1. Right on. Iowa is one of the places where I grew up!

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  19. Great collaboration Sanaa and Tim - wonderfully done.

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  20. It's awesome to have you two collaborating!

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  21. Nice lines: "as I swim through the crowd, rudderless,
    like a paper boat adrift on the breeze,"

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  22. Well executed you two! Collaboration does not aways ucceed, but this was excellent!

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    1. Glad you enjoyed it. All best to you for the holidays!

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