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Saturday, March 30, 2013

IN A WORLD WITHOUT


She exists in a world
without cake and ice cream
never curious enough
to rub the lamp
in the proper way
to make the genie appear
and take her on that
roller coaster ride
climbing slowly to the top 
then
a split second 
and
over the hump you go
my girl
hurtling toward
the inevitable
the all consuming
point of no return 
screaming like a banshee
all the way down

You'd see the whole business
in a much different light
I said
much differently
than asking me
what's the point
of any of it
indulging me
while your nail polish dries
there in your world
without cake and ice cream


33 comments:

  1. how heartbreaking...not to have ice cream...you can keep the cake..i mean i will eat it if i have to, but ice cream, that is sad...a life uncurious would be rather sad as well...

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  2. ... I'd settle for the cherry on top ... anytime ...

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  3. BRIAN: No fun going to bed without dessert.

    CAT: I thought those have all disappeared!

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  4. Oh I hear you, Timo. My waistline attests to it:)

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  5. Her angry senryu?
    :<)_m

    a cake crumb
    stuck in my fresh nail polish
    ice cream

    (I scream?)

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  6. SHERRY: Let 'em eat cake, I say.
    MARIAN: Hmmm...should I guess what that means?
    MAGYAR/DOUG: Ooh...dat be naughty (and deliciously so!)

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  7. One ticket for the roller coaster please....

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  8. KERRY: I just happen to have a roll of tickets right here!

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  9. MARIAN: I think it means you like the roller coaster?

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  10. A roller coaster ride and ice cream...now that is life.

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  11. Life's too short - pass that lamp over here!

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  12. SUSIE: You know you'll spill the ice cream all over you on that roller coaster LOL

    OTHER MARY: Sounds like you may have gotten this poem...but not sure about some others (besides Kerry). WHAT DO YOU THINK FOLKS...IS THIS ONE GOING OVER PEOPLE'S HEADS, OR ARE THEY JUST BEING DISCREETLY SUBTLE IN THEIR COMMENTS???

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  13. I think I get it. Life is too short to worry about perfect nails. Eat the cake and ice cream and have fun while you can!

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  14. RAZZAMADAZZLE: Well, yeah, that's a valid interpretation too...but there is something else I'm alluding to...a kind of "hands on" approach to life...ya see, the roller coaster is a metaphor, and the lamp is a metaphor...and knowing the way my mind runs, it shouldn't be too difficult to figure out!

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  15. So clever! The ride to the "top", the "split" second and the "all consuming" point of no return! Love this!

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  16. JENNY: Oh, you nasty (and quite astute) girl.

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    1. Tim, oh my. I just got it! (blushing!)

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  17. Wow! Talk about layered writing. So glad I glanced at comments on the way down. Now I'm going back for another read.

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  18. Sad to live in a world without ice cream, then again, she could be faking it. ;-)

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  19. JENNY: NOW you got it! LOL
    VICTORIA: Going back for more...atta girl!
    MRS. MEDIOCRITY: How true...but have you ever heard that slogan: "Fake it till you make it?"

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  20. a sad world without cake and icecream and the bravery to rub the lamp the right way and just risk living...

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  21. I think this poem is about sex . One party has a fear of heights and the other has been reading too many Superman comics:)

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  22. Never to be a risk taker because of too much care and rightness; never to fantasise and dare to live the dream; never to get beyond the artificial make up - what a strait jacket is such a life! Almost like living by someone's else's rules, indulgences and social conventions AND losing a sense of being self along the way! Interesting poem!

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  23. CLAUDIA: Ya gotta learn to rub it the right way, no?
    GEMMA: So nice to hear from you!

    CRESSIDA: YOU WIN THE GOLD STAR! Cute comment.

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  24. really nice use of image here, particularly with the imbuing of very strong symbolic qualities to each, especially the cake and ice cream. Nicely done. Thanks

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  25. FRED: Thank you, sir!

    NOW CLASS, CAN ANYONE ELSE EXPLAIN THE SYMBOLISM OF WHAT YOU SEE IN THE PHOTO?

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  26. Aussie chicks find it difficult to unravel these esoteric intellectual types of poems.Could be a trouser snake poem. Adorning your doodle with a cherry is not the Aussie way.Although we are getting a lot of American tourists down under so it would not surprise me if the practice was introduced.

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  27. RALLENTANDA: Intellectual? (Trouser snake...is that an Aussie term?)

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  28. A life without sweetness, literally and metaphorically, would be pretty sad. Great poem with lots of layers (and cherry on top). Thank you for visiting my blog :)

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  29. hey it's the one tim to the other (the come to timmy tim at wordpress)

    you got some interesting stuff yourself

    thanks for the awareness - shall be reading more

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