HE IS CREAM...SHE IS CHEESE...
WHAT A SPECTACULAR COMBINATION!
Sanaa and I began talking a few weeks ago and seemed to really hit it off. We discovered that we share the love of autumn, and so the poem before you quickly began to unfold. We hope you enjoy it and look forward to hearing your thoughts in the comments.
When the gales of November come early
I’m a total wreck
wind knocked out of my sails
but I’ve set a course for
The Sea Of Tranquility
and I’ll be there
when that big moon
sweeps these storms from my heart.
Now these clouds
cold, mean and gray sideways rain
point toward the dark road
my mind is travelling in,
the bruising of November
teaches one about existence, its brevity
I wonder if the moon knows time
and course, as leaves curl in colors of Fall.
There is a melancholy vibe
this time of year--
I can feel it in the forced gaiety
beginning to build
as I swim through the crowd, rudderless,
like a paper boat adrift on the breeze,
and for small moments
I will succumb to the mass hypnosis
With wild berries clinging for support,
I observe the breeze,
an unseen one act nearly farce
painstakingly scrape to leave a patch of stillness
uncovered for a short while,
my lips are stained with the thought of woe
prevalent
hauling one to a place where light cannot reach.
But I’ve had it with these subterranean homesick blues.
I shall emerge from these depths--
the mole in your midst
burrowing to the sun.
The world is fraught with overt boogeymen.
They cannot frighten survivors
who’ve been to scarier places in their own minds
than your sardonic smile could ever intimate.
Let this be the end
as air’s imbued with wet leaves and contemplation
is a swirl of mist;
a sliver of dark orange disseminating doldrums.
My faith akin to myriad of stones
that become the shade of highway that lies
unruffled behind them--
I witness the break of day and run forth to embrace.
Springs and autumns flash by in an instant.
I make a wish and the universe
rains its poetry down upon me.
To embrace both the darkness and
the light within us is the way of understanding.
November brings the winds of change.
I stand in the awe-filled silence
waiting to feel its sharp graze against my cheek.
I could watch them a while, this feeling that blends
with fall foliage
for when struck with the right note of sobriety
even the most dismal of life’s turns are rendered facile.
The hour smiles and extends its hand to me,
as rain conjures a delicate pattern
upon my skin
and the winds of change blend with autumn zephyrs sighing.
Wow! What a SPECTACULAR collaboration. I love how , in collaboration, inspiration seems heightened and the end result seems always to be the amplifying of both voices. I especially love "the mole in your midst burrowing towards the sun". And the universe raining poetry.........well, I loved it all. An exceptional collab! Yay!
ReplyDeleteThank you so much, Sherry!❤️ I felt exactly the same way and think our poetic energies blended instantly! I am glad you enjoyed it 😍😍
DeleteI love that you picked out those lines, Sherry! Thanks for your wonderful comment!
DeleteAmazing collaboration!
ReplyDeleteThanks so much, Linda. It's great to see you here.
DeleteThank you so much, Linda 😘 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️
DeleteAlas, springs and autumns do flash by in an instant. Indeed all of life is that way, but I think we are even more aware of this when the seasons change. I like the hour smiling and extending its hand. It seems that that hour is beckoning and welcoming us, guided by those winds of change. Very nice collaboration. Not easy to achieve!!
ReplyDeletePlease accept our humble thanks for your kind words, Mary. Sanaa and I do so enjoy it when readers quote some of their favorite lines from the poem. (And we're wondering when the speculation will begin as to who wrote which lines or phrases) :)
DeleteThank you so much, Mary 😘 I agree, we are more aware of the shift in mood as the seasons change and give us time to contemplate ❤️
DeleteWow, indeed!!! And ha ha, Timoteo, the speculation already began in my case. But it is very seamless, so hard to pick. I was thinking alternate verses (first verse yours, second Sanaa's and so forth) but there are seven verses and I think you would have shared more equally. favourite lines and phrases? One – which I recognise as Sanaa's because she has used it elsewhere – 'as leaves curl in colours of fall'. I really love every line and every word of this – and stand-outs for me are
ReplyDeleteTo embrace both the darkness and
the light within us is the way of understanding.
November brings the winds of change.
I stand in the awe-filled silence
waiting to feel its sharp graze against my cheek.
and
The hour smiles and extends its hand to me,
as rain conjures a delicate pattern
upon my skin
and the winds of change blend with autumn zephyrs sighing.
Oh boy, the parts of the two stanzas that you quoted, Rosemary--I'll tell you this much...we are each represented there! We thought we'd wait until most of the comments are in tomorrow before revealing our process...gotta keep 'em guessing until the end, right? So stay tuned! (Actually, there are eight stanzas!)
DeleteI never could count! LOL
DeletePS I will guess my first selection to be yours and the second Sanaa's. So interesting! If I am right, it would seem that each of you retains a distinctive voice even when blended so well with another's.
DeleteI think the aspect of the distinctive voice will become more recognizable when we reveal what our process was, and people will say, "Oh, of course, I knew it all along!" But before that maybe they really didn't. Smiles.
DeleteThank you so much, Rosemary 😍😍 I quite enjoyed the creative flow and process. I found that the rhythm and words came on their own as the poem progressed ❤️
ReplyDeleteIt must have been most fascinating to undertake.
DeleteYes it certainly was!!❤️
Delete"The world is fraught with overt boogeymen." What a fantastic line! And so perfect for autumn, with Halloween approaching, and the Veil thinning...
ReplyDeleteSo glad that line resonated with you, Magaly! And Halloween brings out the boogeyman in most of us. Don't watch those scary movies alone! :)
DeleteI can't get used to this 'boogeyman' business, LOL. We Aussies know quite well that it's 'bogyman'; even the Macquarie Dictionary says so, so there!
DeleteThe difference is that bogymen don't really know how to boogie! :)
Delete@Magaly; Yes it's delicious and perfect for Halloween that's approaching, so glad you liked it!!❤️
Delete@Rosemary; Wow! So interesting to learn that it's "bogyman," in Macquarie Dictionary!❤️
DeleteVery true, Timoteo, bogymen sure don't boogie. They are SCARY!
Delete"Boogeyman" is the typical spelling of the word in the U.S. "Bogeyman" seems to be the typical spelling in the U.K. and some other areas of the world. Speaking of scary, your instincts about our process in writing the poem were spot on. I wrote the first stanza. Sanaa wrote the second stanza. We alternated stanzas throughout the poem in that manner.
DeleteThere are so many wonderful thoughts and images in this poem
ReplyDeleteThank you Jae. I do feel that the poem whispers more and more secrets upon the second or third reading.
DeleteThank you so much, Jae 😘 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️
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ReplyDeleteI love your collaboration! From the title to the last line, so much that’s wonderful. I particularly enjoyed the opening stanza and the big moon sweeping storms from the heart of a total wreck, so familiar. I also love the lines:
ReplyDelete‘…I swim through the crowd, rudderless,
like a paper boat adrift on the breeze’
and
‘November brings the winds of change.
I stand in the awe-filled silence
waiting to feel its sharp graze against my cheek.’
We're loving that you love it, Kim. Thanks so much!
DeleteThank you so much, Kim 😍 we enjoyed writing it!❤️
DeleteProof that collaboration pays...Big time. Salute!
ReplyDeleteRon, you just reminded me of this great old inspirational song by Canned Heat called "Let's Work Together!"
DeleteThank you so much, Ron! It was wonderful writing alongside Tim ❤️ and I ended up learning a lot from him!
DeleteWhat a wonderful collaboration! Both of you have managed to drag the darkness into the light and shown hope in the season.
ReplyDeleteAwww gosh!❤️ Thank you so much, Vivan 😍 so glad the poem resonated with you!❤️
DeleteThis is such a seamless collaboration.. and the subject of the autumn is close to my heart too... it represent so much for me too, especially the passing of time...
ReplyDeleteThank you so much, Bjorn 😃😃 so glad you enjoyed it!❤️
DeleteI love this collaberation Sanaa and Timoteo!!
ReplyDeleteThank you so much, Carrie 😍 we are glad that you do!❤️
DeleteWhat a thrill to read this. My heart heard it like a song - a wonderful duet of distinct yet perfectly blended voices unified by sense and emotion. Well done, you two!
ReplyDeleteThank you so much, H 😃😃 so glad you enjoyed it!❤️
DeleteThanks for your exquisite comment, H. Hennenburg!
DeleteCertainly enjoyed reading your poem.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much, Julian 😃☕ so good to see you!❤️
DeleteSome poems, and this is one of them, seem like the essence of a novel, steeped and wafting through the air. The turns and the images, the uplifts and chills...you both have managed to make a secure structure of them and the result is a marvelous read!
ReplyDeleteAwww gosh!❤️ Thank you so much, Chrissa 😃 so glad you liked it!
DeleteWhat an awesome collaboration! This reads like a poetic ride as it moves through so many good things in so many ways. It was a pleasure to read this beautifully rendered, evocative piece!
ReplyDeleteWendy: It's so heartwarming to hear comments such as these. Thank you for being there. Much love!
DeleteI think you described November in Iowa very well. The winds change and "melancholy" is what it is. Thank you
ReplyDeleteRight on. Iowa is one of the places where I grew up!
DeleteGreat collaboration Sanaa and Tim - wonderfully done.
ReplyDeleteMuchas gracias. Good to hear from you!
DeleteIt's awesome to have you two collaborating!
ReplyDeleteMuch appreciated, Jenna.
DeleteNice lines: "as I swim through the crowd, rudderless,
ReplyDeletelike a paper boat adrift on the breeze,"
Thank you Frank!
DeleteWell executed you two! Collaboration does not aways ucceed, but this was excellent!
ReplyDeleteGlad you enjoyed it. All best to you for the holidays!
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